Thank you. First off, let me say I do want to hear how my writing can be improved. What I don't want to hear from people who review stories is: "I hate your ******* story. You should crawl in a hole and die, you *******". First off, I have no idea why they didn't like my story, and second, if that is how they write a review, then I probably shouldn't be taking writing advice from them. I'll make sure to pay much more attention to grammar and spelling the next time I write a story and go over it.
About the non-canon part. Yes, I made it different for two reasons. Number one: I wanted to expand on it at some point in time. Basically, this could be the premise for future stories. I don't know about everyone else, but I've always enjoyed a recurring villain, so I wanted to incorporate that here. Trust me, in future non-canon stories, he will be back.
Number two: I wanted to create a plot, or a premise for future episodes, where the enemies are not black-and-white. What that means is that I didn't want the bad guy to just be a mindless villain who wants to destroy things for fun. My goal at the end was that the reader could understand, at some length, the views of both sides. One side acted for the greater good, and the other acts for honor. That's why I wanted to play around with that. I didn't think that would fit too well on the main series, because at the end of the episode, one side didn't "win".
Glad you enjoyed it. I tried to include the "mysterious" parts right before the end of an act, since if it ever became televised (like a bonus "lost" episode on a Buck Rogers in the 26th Century DVD
), then it would be right by the commercials. Of course, there wouldn't be commercials on a DVD... Oh, and just joking about the lost episode bit. I knew what this was when I wrote it, and I didn't make it fit in with the rest of the series.